Descriptive Essay


English 1010


Descriptive Essay (p. 92)


Part A
I. Surrounded by the old forest, I rested upon a throne-like rock that faced the stunning blue ocean. Being the queen of the moment, I could hear the birds chirping and the rustling of the leaves above me. I looked around me and realized tall trees with luscious green leaves enclosed me, giving me a warm feeling of peace. With a sigh of content, I looked out over the sea. The sunís reflection started on the point of the horizon and grew. As it grew, the shimmer faded.


I felt a strong breeze on my face and the noise of the leaves became louder. The tide was coming in. The waves hit the large rocks with such force that the water sent out an explosion of droplets of water, which sparkled in the sun.


It was amazingly overwhelming; the sight brought me to a perfect tranquility Iíd never felt before. I was queen for a few minutes, and my heart wonít forget how I felt.


II. The humid air made it hard to breathe, and I needed to rest. I found a large rock that was quite uncomfortable. Its jagged edges poked me in my thighs. I could hear the birds chirping obnoxiously to one another on the branches above me. The forest was old. Why hadnít anybody cut it down for a theme park yet? The sun shone brightly in my eyes, which made me see a spot of the color blue everywhere I looked, even when I blinked.


As I sat, I looked out over the ocean and pondered how anyone would want to be near it. I found it dull. Itís big mass of water and has animals, big deal. The waves were made loud noises as they hit the rocks below, and made me want to go flip the switch to off so my headache would go away.

Part B
A writer and reader both need to understand the others point of view. Everyone has different backgrounds. While writing, I tried to remember that the readers have never been to this spot, and that they need a full description to be able to understand why this place means so much to me.


When I was preparing to write my descriptions, I first wrote out a list of places I could write on. I chose this particular one because itís somewhere that I have been many times throughout my life, and I know the area very well. As I started to write, I realized that I am not good at expressing the senses. I can see the spot perfectly in my mind, but I donít know how to put it into words.


It is very important to describe thoroughly what you see. It makes reading much more interesting. It is boring to read anything without good descriptions. The reader could be visualizing something completely opposite from what the author wants.


At the point where I wasnít sure how to explain what was needed, I wrote out as many words I could think of that describe the main objects in my paper. I found this very useful. I realized by doing this, that it is a smart idea to start with the basics, and not expect to just be able to be a descriptive writer.


What I found difficult was writing it negatively. I learned that I needed to look at the place from a different angle. I needed to pretend that I was someone that was very negative, and unwilling to accept the beauty of the outdoors.


From here on, I know how to write through different eyes. Every time I write, I will do as I did with these descriptions, and write a list that describes each object, and carefully choose which words I will use to help visualize the moment with the reader.